Wednesday, May 23, 2012

Flash Fiction Blogfest

Cherie Reich is hosting a flash fiction blogfest that ends today. The rules are:

    Here are the rules:
  1. Entries must begin with the two words: Lightning flashed.
  2. Entries must be 300 words or less and be in prose.
  3. Entries must be posted on your blog between May 21 - 23.
  4. You must sign up in the linky to have your entry be counted.

And here's my entry. This was... cathartic:

Lightning flashed. Thunder crashed. Rain poured.

I heard none of it.

My brain buzzed. Dead, dead, dead.

No.

He couldn't be dead. I had to get there in time.

I had to save him.

"Chase!" I knew he wouldn't be able to hear me, not over the thunder and the rain and the dead, dead, dead, but I willed him to realize I was coming. Willed him to have hope.

Willed him to live.

Then I heard the scream.

"No!" I took the turn too fast, sliding on wet grass and landing hard on my knee, but I only felt numb. "Chase!"

I hit the clearing at a dead run, and I didn't stop to think about the fact that I was small and weak. I just saw the ungodly figure rise up with Chase—my Chase—defenseless below it.

I jumped on its back.

It roared and bucked, but I clung to it as it rose to its full, 14-foot height.

I didn't look down.

The hilt of my knife pressed into my hip, and I fumbled for it. In a swift, confident motion, I ran it up into the spot where the jaw meets the ear. Blood soaked me, pungent and inhuman, but I forced the blade farther, slicing across, severing the head.

It fell, but I rolled away and was crawling to Chase before the ground settled. "Chase." Tears burned my nose. Every part of him looked broken or bleeding. I didn't know where I could touch.

Dead, dead, dead.

Then he coughed. "Lex?"

I laughed, watery and almost hysterical. "Yeah."

Another cough, a little stronger. "Remember when I said I wanted to go camping?"

"Yeah?"

He opened one eye, and the knot of tears in my throat broke as he said, "I'm sorry about that."

17 comments:

  1. You are a SUPER STAR. Yup. Here's your gold star. That was awesome!

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  2. I liked that you left the monster somewhat ambiguous. I imagined some reptilian dragon of sorts.

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  3. Oh I like it! And you totally give me a giggle at the end and those are the best! Great job!!

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  4. Yikes. Now I don't want to go camping. LOL. Great job!

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  5. Ha, what a great ending! You are so good with flash fiction!

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  6. Intense! I loved the ending too :)

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  7. Ha ha. Love it! The ending definitely caught me off guard.

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  8. Loved the ending. Glad he wasn't dead, dead, dead.

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  9. Intense scene with a humerous ending. Nice entry!

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  10. I like how your brought the humor into the end of an otherwise scary story!

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  11. Aww! So great! I really enjoyed this flash fiction story. The repetition was brilliant and created a good voice and intensity.

    I'll announce the finalists tomorrow.

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  12. You did really well in creating suspense. I also liked the humor in the end. It's impressive how you brought such a short piece to a good close.

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  13. That was suspenseful. I'm glad Chase is okay.

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  14. That was a whole lot of awesome. Your pacing was perfect, and Lex's victory, just thrilling. That last bit was a great release for all the tension! :-) Great piece.
    Some Dark Romantic

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  15. That was really intense! I felt the adrenaline all the way through. Wonderful scene! :)

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